Although the idea of free tutoring sounds attractive, the solution lies in offering a wider variety of classes, which ultimately encourages students to stay in school.' This essay goes on to give ample support of details about why it's important to give a wider variety of classes and furthermore really hummers home a strong counter argument that shows why free tutoring just won't work.
Let's take a look at how it measures up to some of the key indicators that we've discussed earlier.
Very clearly the essay states, ' The solution lies in offering a wider variety of classes, which ultimately encourages students to stay in school.' They're not straddling in the fence, they tell you what it is they're going to prove that they should go with 'the offering a wider variety of classes,' and gives the reason.
The reason behind this is that 'it ultimately encourages students to stay in school.' Alright let's take a look at ' Complexity and development.' So here is where the readers are really looking for you to show a global view that you've considered all different viewpoints and then supported it with specific examples.
Finally sentence structure and grammar, we're going to look at those together since they really have to do with the mechanics of the essay.
The really solid thing that this essay does is offer lots of sentence variety.We're going to lump some of those indicators together just for easy sake because they really go hand in hand.So let's talk about how it did with 'task and position.' This essay did a really solid job of setting up the task, showing an understanding of it and then taking a strong position.Go ahead and go to the bonus materials and print it out.Again I'm going to start with reading the first paragraph but it really will be important for you to have a hard copy on front of you to follow along.We spend a lot of time talking about all of the essential components of a good ACT style essay.In this episode we're going to take a look at some sample essays that were written by actual students in response to an ACT style prompt.These are all the reasons why this essay earned an 11 which is where you want to be, ideally scoring ten to 12 on the ACT writing.Now let's take a look at sample essay number two.Additionally this essay uses an advance vocabulary but it's not only advanced, it's used appropriately.So here the example is, ' Free tutoring doesn't aim at the heart of the problems facing schools; a wider variety of classes does by livening interest in school up until graduation.' So we've just seen an advance sentence structure and an advance use of vocabulary very strong commendable language.